Sam Kolle
6-18-11
Two Worlds
Deep
in the harsh green woods of North Carolina, there is a perfect, uninterrupted
strip of asphalt cutting through the mountains and over white rapids. A
spotless ribbon of the modern world, technology was tearing across the
landscape set so randomly and so perfectly across the damp, cold state. One
spec of a car shot across the winding road.
Chris Landerston
rode quickly but silently from his dad’s house in Mentreno to Grenton to see his
mom. He gripped feverishly and angrily at the leather steering wheel trapped
between his sweaty fingers. His head was outrunning the car, buzzing with
thoughts of his people. How could such a blessed life leave such wreckage and
havoc? He breathed with such strain that he had to stop to catch his breath
every couple of miles. Inside of the car was a cool 60 degrees, with calming
jazz pumping calmingly through the car’s speakers, hidden by leather, not t to
blemish the beautifully plain brown interior. Chris sat, expressionless in the
driver’s seat with a thin undershirt and grey khakis. His shoes and socks were
tossed carelessly onto the passenger seat, radiating an odor unmatched by
anything in the rest of the state. Under the monotonous blur of the jazz, there
were two faint but distinct sounds. One was the dull hum of the motor,
struggling on at immense speeds on little gas. The other was the inner workings
of Chris’s mind. He was working feverously to solve a puzzle that he knew he
could not.
Just a few miles
ahead of him was the Ying. George was walking along in his ragged overcoat.
George was happy. The air was cold but clear, and his stomach was filled by his
leftover pork ‘n beans. Nearly skipping, he was drunk on life, and happy to be
a part of the world’s sick play. Every mile George would stop to meditate,
peering over a mountainside from the top, or up to the top from a deep valley.
He was at peace with himself in his own ragged poverty. He was happy with the
clothes on his back and the sack on his clothes. He grew up like any other
middle class American, eventually outspeeding his peers, expected to go on to
the ivy league school, but instead he went to the roads to find a job in the
middle of the country. When he got there, he found out that it wasn’t what he
was meant to be doing. Instead, he kept going. He would pick up odd jobs on his
way to nowhere, but it was getting harder and harder for a college dropout to
keep on his own road. He knew all of the tricks, and always had enough cash in
his wallet for a bottle of whiskey. He picked up friends and dropped them at a
moments notice, but he was happy. He kept a ragged journal in his pack and
would stop to jot down notes like “the sky is pretty tonight”. As soon as he
could get off a sentence, he would be off again, “for it is better to watch
than to record”, he said.
Just as the
temperature dropped and the sky grew darker, Chris slowed to a stop in front of
a bitter looking failure walking along the streets. Just as George was getting
ready to set up camp for the night, a shiny new Bentley slowed to a stop in
front of him with some stuck up rich kid alone at the wheel.
“Got gas money?”
asked Chris.
“Do ya need it?”
shot back George.
They took a second
to examine each other. Both around twenty, one was smudged with dirt and grime,
the other with sweat and scratches. They quickly both set out into the night in
the car, a streak of light cast against the darkness of the cold, inky night
air.
This was phenomenal. Sam you are an excellent writer and definitely have a future in it. We felt like we were reading a novel and not just a student paper.. Will you write more for us?
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love Mallory and Laura
Dude this was swag. Your fantastic at your craft.
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*cough cough On the Road cough*
ReplyDeleteI loved the descriptiveness of literally every line. It painted a vivid picture. I'd love to know where the story is taken from here. Just out of curiosity, did you have the shining in mind when writing the first couple of sentences? That's the first image that came to my mind.
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Great descreption, and good vocabulary! Small typo "not t to blemish" Lots of spacing between paragraphs, coulld have been a bit more lengthy, but overall a great story!
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haha, yep, the shining was exactly what i was describing. nice pick up. i think i confused carolina with dakota, but still.
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